Egg races

WALT: think about my purpose and reader by planning my recount.


Yesterday we did a difficult egg race. We had to race to one side of the park to the other swithing it over to our partner. It was fun watching them.

Before the race had started it was nervrackikng. All of us was scared because we might have cracked the egg. We were all ready to start some of us were shivering saying “ i’m going to drop it”.

The race had began our partners were taking there time trying not to drop it. Some were close to finishing 1 team of partners droped there egg just before they finished. My partner Alfa was slow and steady zig -zaging through the park  he had finished.

It was now challenging for as it is my turn. It took the spoon and placed the egg gently  on the spoon. I went off walking over the old wodden brown platforms in the park I was finding it difficult to try not to drop. When i was close to finishing the difficult egg race I run a little bit.

It was funny and difficult. This was really a challenging walking over old wodden brown platforms the egg was fragile i was really gentle. Some of us bumbed into each other.

My Recount Rubric

Recount Writing
	1	2	3	4
Write for my reader	I've tried to think about my reader	My writing shows some awareness of reader because my writing is quite clear and I have tried to interest my reader.	My writing is easy to understand and I have tried to tell the reader what it was like to be there by giving details and my thoughts.	My writing really considers audience as reader because I have kept their interest and made them feel like they know exactly what it was like for me.
Purpose	I tried to meet the purpose	My text goes some way towards meeting the purpose	The message is clear in some parts of the recount.	My text fully meets the purpose. The message is clear all through the recount.
Introduction	My introduction does not yet clearly orientate or hook in my reader.	My introduction gets some buy in from audience and they can understand what I am going to write about.	My introduction hooks in my reader and it is clear what I am writing about.	My introduction wows my reader!
Paragraph Topics	My paragraphs are confused and don't follow my plan.	I have tried to follow my plan. Most my paragraphs are about 1 big idea and I have added some detail.	My paragraphs have some complex as well as simple sentences. Post paragraphs give details about 1 big idea. I have followed the paragraph topic in my plan.	My paragraphs have complex and simple sentences. Paragraphs all give details about 1 big idea.

Today we learnt how to write purpose. To write our paragraph we did egg racing, we learnt how to write about our topic and don't write about something else.